Should There Be Limits To Our Information?
Topic sentence

People should have access to as much information as possible.

Elaboration

If a certain amount of information is given to the citizens, they will be able to gain knowledge. People with knowledge can determine their own fate. These people can also be a factor in helping his or her country thrive. Also if people have access to information. Some people may say that if the citizens have too much information it could be harmful to the society. However, it is more the case that too little information is harmful to the people.

Examples/Evidence

One example is when the people in North Korea had little access to information, people become ignorant and a dictator like Kim Jung Il can take advantage over their ignorance. This became politically bad for them because they weren't able to develop as a country or even make a good living because they aren't able to bring new ideas and look for change. Another example of a society with limited information can be found during the Middle Ages. During the Middle Ages, people lived an agricultural life and didn't move to other places. Therefore, ideas were kept to themselves and information was not shared. This slowed down the economy.

Explanation/Analysis

Since people can't have access to information, people suffer from lack of knowledge. When there is no knowledge, then there can be no progress, economically or politically. competition, nor have basic thoughts outside of their country. This is the reason why North Korea people are suffering under dictatorship and why it is one of the poorest countries in the world.

Link sentence

Therefore, people should have access to as much information as possible. Information often does more good than harm.

My final draft:

People should have access to as much information as possible. If a certain amount of information is given to the citizens, they will be able to gain knowledge. People with knowledge can determine their own fate. These people can also be a factor in helping his or her country thrive. Some people may say if the citizens have too much access to information it could be harmful to the society. However, it is more the case that too little information is harmful to the people. An example is when the people in North Korea had little access to information, they became ignorant and a dictator like Kim Jung Il can take advantage over their ignorance. This became politically bad for the citizens of North Korea because they weren't able to develop as a whole or even make a good living because they aren't able to bring new ideas and look for change. Another example of a society with limited information are found during the Middle Ages. During the Middle Ages, people lived an agricultural life and didn't move to other places. Therefore, ideas were kept to themselves and information was not shared. This slowed down the North Korean economy. Since people can't have access to information, people suffer from lack of knowledge. When there is no knowledge, then there can be no progress, economically or politically. competition, nor have basic thoughts outside of their country. These are the reasons why North Korean are suffering under dictatorship and why it is one of the poorest countries in the world. Therefore, people should have access to as much information as possible. Information often does more good than harm.